Writers Commentary – Issue # 1 - Step into the Darkness Pt. 1 (pages 1 – 4)

My original introduction was just a couple of simple long shots of Jade walking into the building where he was staying and being watched by and talked about separately by the ECD (government agents) and Shade and Hunter. I felt that this was a little bland. I had devised some dialog to hook you into the story but, this is a visual medium I’m writing for.

The attack on Shade gives the story a shot of adrenaline straight off the mark and gives you a little insight into Shades character and a preview of Mr. Sunday, two major characters within the story. Also the dialogue gives the little teasers like Shade being called’ Samurai’ and the force of the ‘Sun-Gun’ (the blast that hits Shade)

What it also does is show why Jade is needed to take up the mantle of the Seed, because Shade has been injured. As the story goes forward that should be clear to the reader as should the reason that it took four years to find Jade.

The ultimate aim of the introduction was to tantalise the reader and hook them into the story. Hopefully I’ve achieved that with out confusing the reader too much.